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| *Ostroff, Fair and Company>>>Financial Services |
Is this a great cover letter? Atleast 20 responses please . Thank you? |
I am applying for a loan processor and a friend recomm. this job to me. Tell me what you think of the cover letter. Dear Loan Processing Manager: John Smith recommended I contact you regarding the open Loan Processor II position with Financial Comp. I believe my experience as a debt collector presently, will make me a candidate for the position. As you will see from the enclosed resume, I have over a year of experience in the financial industry and five years of customer service experience in retail and communications. My resume shows I have been in positions with great deals of responsibilities based on my work ethic and assertiveness. My desire to excel personally and professionally helped me reach my goals in the past leaving me confident with the future of my career. If you have questions or would like to schedule an interview, please contact me at 1234567890. I look forward to meeting you to further discuss employment opportunities with Financial. Sincerely Dear Loan Processing Manager: John Smith recommended I contact you regarding the open Loan Processor II position with Financial Comp. I believe my experience in financial services makes me a strong candidate for the position. My current responsibilities include xxx, xxx and xxx. I also have more than five years experience in customer service. Please consider my attached resume for the position. I am happy to provide references at your request. Sincerely Yes pretty good It looks pretty good but I would add some specific details or accomplishments. If you reached a specific sales goal in a previous position or know one or two details about the company you're applying for, that would be helpful. I think it looks good. Its seems pretty good best of luck 4 ur interview I would make a few changes; but overall very good. If you know the name of the company and the address put that at the top Jane Smith Human Resources Financial Comp Anytown, USA 12345 First- I believe my experience as a debt collector presently- TAKE OUT PRESENTLY. Say something like this. I believe this position is an excellent match to my professional background. Two- Rather than say I have over one year of experience in finance and five years in experienc. Say the follwing is a highlight of my qualifacations USE BULLET POINTS It is better to show your qualifiacations than just talk about them. Make three or four bullet points that really showcase why you should be called in for an interview Examples are sotware programs or duties you performed in the past that are important in this job. My desire to excel personally and professionally helped me reach my goals in the past leaving me confident with the future of my career- TAKE THIS OUT. LEAVE THINGS LIKE THIS TO THE INTERVIEW Reword the last paragraph a little. You dont sound confident in your skills and abilities. Say something like. I look forward to hearing from you regarding the position. I may be reached at ....... THIS WAY YOU SOUND CONFIDENT THAT YOU SHOULD BE CALLED IN FOR AN INTERVIEW Ten years work experience |
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